College Essay Bootcamp Day 4: Conclusions, Drafting, Peer Critiques

CACAW!

1. Community Announcements:

• Let’s review who I am conferencing with today and tomorrow!
• Peer critique is today and tomorrow. Please print three copies of your essay so you can work outside and give your group members each their own draft to mark up OR EMAIL ME if you don’t have access to a printer at home. 
• Final draft is due via GOOGLE CLASSROOM 
• As per my late policy- tomorrow is the last day to turn in your letter to your teachers if it is missing.
• Ashley’s Amphitheater classes begin next week on in-person days, weather permitting:
  • Bring something to sit (blanket, camp chair, foam pad, etc…), sunglasses, notebook, pens/pencils, and warm layers! 

         2. Concerns? Wonders?! (we’ll do appreciations tomorrow)

STARTER 4: Turn and talk

1. What makes a strong conclusion? 
2. What are examples of ways you all are concluding your essays?

Writing a Great Conclusion Workshop
We’ll read about three strategies for ending your essay and then practice each one before getting some feedback from friends!

Revision Resources

• Let’s review the 4 qualities of a great essay from the rubric for this assignment! 
• Here’s a revision check-list that might be helpful: Revision Checklist from Escape Essay Hell guide- pages 41-42
• Struggle with grammar? Take this handout!

Work Time Goals
Share out:

1. At what stage is your draft?
2. What are your goals for today’s class time?  (Provide and receive quality feedback and begin refining? Finish a draft? Outline your ideas and write at least ½ page)

Work time, Conferences and Peer Critiques!

Vets- you are up for peer critique today!  Please read the instructions in GREEN below and follow them for your peer critique. 

• Pod 1: Sam A, Chris A and Cormac
• Pod 2: Ainsley, Trevor, Billie, Ty

Step 1: Prepare for the peer critique

1. What is one thing you really like about your essay/topic?
2. What is one thing you do not like or would like to change?
3. What is a question you need help with from your group?
   EXAMPLES:  Do I balance scene and analysis well?  Does my word choice and tone show my personality?  How could my hook grab your attention better?  How can I end my essay in a less obvious way? Do you understand the moral of my story clearly? How could that be clearer or stronger?

Step 2:  Peer Critiques-- Here is the protocol handout

1. Group up!
2. Elect a timekeeper with military precision and a facilitator to read the directions for the protocol and help your group follow the directions.
3. Read the instructions for protocol #1
4. Complete critiques for each person using the protocol #1 
5. When you are done, your group should check in with me and tell me what your major refinement needs are AND grab a mini-lesson resource from me relevant to your refinement needs.
6. Need more help with revisions?
   1. Revision Strategies
   2. Revision Checklist from Escape Essay Hell guide- pages 41-42
      
      

Students who are doing peer critique tomorrow→ Work Time!

1. Continue drafting/brainstorming/outlining (See docs page for helpful resources)
2. Conference with Ashley
3. Revise, revise, revise! 

EXIT TICKET

1. What is one thing you did to improve your essay today?
2. What is one additional thing you need to do to improve it?
3. What is one appreciation you have about someone in our pod or at this school that you can share tomorrow during CACAW?