Last day of college essay bootcamp and peer crtiques

Today's Agenda

1. Do the Starter
2. Go over announcements/reminders
3. Scene v. Analysis Workshop
4. Peer Critique and Zoom Conferences with Ashley
5. Complete the rubric self-assessment
6. Revision Time 

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Starter 5: Survey Time! (Melissa, please take attendance and email to Christine)

1. Debrief of Week 1: Please click on the Google Form linked here to give me feedback on how this week went!  Please be honest, and as specific as you can.  
2. Student Council's Bridge Program Survey: Please take this survey to let STUCO know your interest for participation in the Bridge program

Announcements/Reminders

• Honors application is due today!
• Today is the last day to turn in "Letter to your Teachers"
• Please turn in your signed syllabus to Melissa, the sub. If you forgot it, parents can find it on my DP and sign and email the last page.
• Final college essay draft due MONDAY at 10:00 am turned in to google classroom.
• Due at end of class: Rubric with reflection .
• Today's (and Monday's) conference schedule with me via ZOOM

Scene v. Analysis Workshop: Read this short handout to compare how one student refined his essay and reflect on:
**Melissa: please handout the 1-page rubric for them while they're working on the workshop!

1. What changes did the student make? (In other words, what was somewhat weak about his first draft, and how did he improve it in the second?)
2. What is one thing you are taking away from his refinements that you could apply to your own essay? (It could either be based on something you  liked about the student’s refined essay or something you did not like, and thus want to avoid or do differently!)

Discuss Workshop Handout

• I’ll talk about the difference between scene v. analysis and the importance of balancing the two
• If you want more help with this skill, here is a good resource for you! Dialogue, Details, Descriptions (and how to format quotes in dialogue)

PEER CRITIQUE PROCESS  (and a reminder on conference schedule with me)

1. Peer Critiques Round 2! Please read the instructions in GREEN below and follow them for your peer critique.
2. At the end of your peer critique, you'll need to turn in the RUBRIC REFLECTION, which I'll give you a hardcopy of in class.

Pod 1 Groups: 

• Finn, Chris P., Rosie, Britt
• Molly, Amira, Sam L., Vinny
• Sarah, Leit, Kandice

Pod 2 Groups: 

• Patrick, Ava, Jake
• Owen, Milo, Lucy
• Nick, Abbey, Xavier, Ryan
• Trevor, Ainsley, Ty, Billie

Step 1: Prepare for the peer critique

1. What is one thing you really like about your essay/topic?
2. What is one thing you do not like or would like to change?
3. What is a question you need help with from your group?
   EXAMPLES:  Do I balance scene and analysis well?  Does my word choice and tone show my personality?  How could my hook grab your attention better?  How can I end my essay in a less obvious way? Do you understand the moral of my story clearly? How could that be clearer or stronger?

Step 2:  Peer Critiques:  Here is the protocol handout

1. Group up!
2. Elect a timekeeper with military precision and a facilitator to read the directions for the protocol and help your group follow the directions.
3. Read the instructions for the protocol
4. Complete critiques for each person,
5. When you are done, complete the rubric reflection and turn that into Melissa, our substitute.

Need more help with revisions?

• Revision Strategies
• ​Revision Checklist from Escape Essay Hell guide- pages 41-42
• Dialogue, Details, Description!
• Sound Smarter- How to fix 10 common grammar glitches
• Dialogue, Details, Description!
• Sound Smarter- How to fix 10 common grammar glitches
• AHS Students' Sample Essays
• More student examples

EXIT TICKET: Rubric Self-Reflection
Turn in the hardcopy to the sub, please!